Dear Mr. Wood,
if you are going to have a main character who "grew up" Brooklyn as opposed to moved here from somewhere else, there is no way in hell that she would say "New York City's not so intimidating",when going to Manhattan for the first time to go to College @ NYU!.
Anyone who was born here would say either Manhattan or the "City" but not NYC. Anyone living in the four outer boroughs would never give Manhattan the name for all of the city.Rant over.
that being said I found the whole thing fairly believable and well written. the dropping of cultural "hotspots" for no more reason than street cred was a tad annoying.